Skittles

In our Skittles writing we were learning how to get to rubric 4 by adding Hook, Appropriate adjectives, adverbs, powerful verbs, smiles, metaphors and alliteration. I need to do this so that the person reading my writing gets a clear picture in their mind. I think I'm doing well because I have used a little personification, adverbs, similes and adjectives. I need to work on using metaphors.
Here is my piece of writing...